Hirameki, Katsuragi Athena

[kyouzou]

Background -

• "He kidnapped her, but before he "

  
  Technically he attempted or tried to kidnap her, he didn't kidnap her
  
  
• What happen to the knife the kidnapper was holding when he put her down and pulled out a gun. If he has two hands, one on the knife and one on her, to get a gun out and push her to the side would infer that either he dropped the knife, pushed her away and pulled out the gun to dropped the knife and pushed her away to pull out a gun with both hands.
  
  
• What types of guns were used on both sides? I ask this because in order for both parents to be killed with 3 bullets is very unlikely for most scenarios I am currently running through my head. Why? Because regardless if the kidnapper pushed the girl away and pulled out the gun or dropped the knife and pulled out the gun, there was a period in which the father could shoot without further risking the life of her daughter and so he would have started shooting before the kidnapper did, it's instinct. Also, by instinct, the mother would surely move to the side when she saw the gun pulled out; or she would duck when she saw it. So in most scenarios, 3 bullets wouldn't be enough assuming he's a sharpshooter and can sustain such high shooting ability while being under fire.
  
  
• How long after their death does the daughter run up to the mother's body? After dying, the human body usually loses body heat at 1 degree per hour. My point here is that you have the daughter running up to the mother's cold body. For it to be cold, it should have been a while after she died or they were in really cold temperatures.
  
  
  

Battle Information -

• Physic Ability? Physic involves medicine; Physics involves the interaction between mass and energy. Either way, you don't need this ability. The ability to see ghosts isn't special enough to require an ability because a large number of those in the Bleach world can perform such a feat.
  
  
• Regardless of how spiritually sensitive they are and how strong their Reiatsu are, humans have a Reiatsu and thus a Reiatsu color. Please provide one.
  
  
• For your other abilities, besides the one mentioned two points ago, please give a more precise effect. If 'Iai-do' Doesn't boost any stats, then it probably shouldn't take a ability slot and should just be stated she knows the art. For Tiger Lunging, please compare it to something so others know how strong. You can compare it to a regular sword slash, an ability present in the bleach world or by how much damage it does against certain other ranks. You can look at approved characters for an idea of what I mean.
  
  

When you are finished with making the fixes, please post informing that you have finished.