Shikai

[taiga]

Zanpakuto Name: Kuzuri [Glutton]
Zanpakuto Spirit:

Kuzuri

Kuzuri is an odd spirit, her and Kumiko differ in more than one way. Kuzuri is headstrong and abrasive, she lust after power, and urges Kumiko to gain it. Kuzuri is strong minded meaning she speak what ever she feels and never holds back. Kuzuri doesn't hate Kumiko, but has a great disdain for her weak and shy nature.

Inner World: Kuzuri's domain Kuzuri's domain is no more than a vast area littered with with skyscrapers. The buildings are all the same, and the bottom seems to go on without end.

Shikai Release Command:Kinshi Kokusaishakai [Inhibit the world]

Shikai Appearance:

Kuzuri's true from



Shikai Type: Inhibition/ Suppression

Shikai Abilities:

• Gabanansu [Governance] — The most utilized of Kuzuri's abilities, when first entrapped inside of Kuzuri's influence, the opponents is subjected to Gabanansu's effect. When cut with her shikai, the opponent slowly looses their ability to properly direct and control their energy. Gabanansu effectively disrupts the flow of reiatsu and seals it. This means any ability that utilizes reiatsu becomes sealed and effectively stopped. This does not effect any releases, but only arts like kidou, hollow techs, and shikai abilities that require reiatsu. Arrancar releases are not effected.
  
  Opponents of the same rank as Kumiko would only be able to rely on hand-to-hand combat, their weapons skills, and their Stepping abilities. As anything such as kidou or dealing with reiatsu is effectively subjected. It should be noted opponents of the same rank are able to effectively release and use there shikai abilities, but the reiatsu cost is up'd to 35%, and this last for 2 post. Those who are a rank below will have their abilities almost completely subjected, there only tool would be there ability to use Hakudo or a weapon, they also can use there shikai abilities, but the cost for reiatsu would be higher almost 45%, this would last for 3 post. Anyone two or more ranks below will be completely powerless as there shikai, reiatsu abilities are completely sealed meaning any use for reiatsu is taken, last 4 post. An opponent one rank above Kumiko would still be able to use their abilities, but to an extremely strained degree; their releases or special abilities would not be half as powerful as they were before being subject to Kuzuri, and the reiatsu cost would be up'd to 20%, this would last 1 post. Opponents two ranks above Kumiko will find their abilities only slightly messed with the cost at 15% more, this would last 1 post and anyone a full three ranks or higher above Kumiko would be totally resistant to Kuzuri reign. Bankai is unaffected as well as Arrancars releases. While in Bankai however only their bankai techs are available to them as any other ability dealing with reiatsu is steal effectively sealed.
  
  Jūzoku [Subjugated]— Kuzuri's final ability is the power to govern and set rules within a stated range. Upon the activation of her shikai an area spanning out to around fifty[50] meters in a spherical like fashion is held within Kuzuri's grasp, meaning any and all spiritual beings who are inside the specified area or wander in, are subjected to Kuzuri's rules and laws. The laws of this domain are absolute and must be followed, are consequences will be enforced. Within Kuzuri's rule there are only three rules which must be adhered to. This even includes Kumiko, she too must abide by the rules and stipulations at all times.
  
  
  • Rule one ;; Fukujū [Obedience] Any spiritual being who jumps more than five [5 ] feet off the ground is immediately prone to attacks. This means wherever Kumiko launches and attack from, it will automatically vanish and appear behind the person who broke the rule. This too applies to Kumiko, as she herself is effected also. If an attack is from a sword the sword will merely pierce the air and appear behind the opponent as if she had the power to bend time and space. This however is not the case. No matter the level of the Opponent if the rule is broken they will still face it's consequences.
    
    
  • Rule two ;; Chūsei [Fealty] Fealty has but one simple rule. There can be no attacks from behind, meaning if you try to attack your opponent from behind what ever attack you use will be redirected by an unseen force, and instead hit you. This happens like Rule one as in whoever tries to strike an enemy from behind there attack will seemingly phase through space, and be redirected to instead attack them. The space were the attack is intended to hit will vanish and instead hit the user instead. Of course the redirected attack will be aimed for the respective back part the user tried to hit.
    
    
  • Rule three ;; Hanketsu [Ruling] The final rule set within the effected range is that each person must attack using their non dominant arm, if you were to use your dominant arm Kumiko or the opponent is able to utilize an ability reminiscent to slicing wind, which gives belief that Kumiko shikai is a wind type. Most opponents almost never figure this out, so it's her most utilized of the three rules. This wind arc is released in a horizontal arc that moves at speeds relative to Sokatsui, and does moderate to high damage. The attacks name is Kaze o sasayaku. These slashes of pressurized wind do moderate damage equal ranks, low damage to higher ranks, and high damage to weaker opponents. to It should be noted that the opponent can also make use of this ability if Kumiko is not using her dominant arm.
    
  
  

[Empty]

It is not possible for you to 'seal' your opponents ability to "exert their Reiryoku"

However it may be possible for you to reduce the efficiency and effectiveness of their attempts to exert any influence over their manifested reiatsu - that is diminish the individual's control over their energies as well as making and such attempts require more energy than usual.

That said - currently it is too powerful even then.

[taiga]

I would like to know why it is impossible to seal and opponents ability to exert their Reiryoku before I scrap this shikai first please? Second, It's not completely seal as it's more of creating a disturbance in a set radius which tampers with and opponents ability to utilize their reiatsu effectively. Why isn't it possible if you have to exert Reiryoku to utilize reiatsu, by dispelling something like a frequency that disrupt the ability for someone to physically manifest there reiatsu. Be it kidou, hollow techs, are even shikai? This is not a rant, but a simple inquiry, if this will not at all be allowed then i shall simply scrap it.

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The ability as it is currently states that it can prevent the use of Reiryoku (the energy that is contained WITHIN the entity - not manifested outside the entity but actually within the entity).

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Lets assume that you were only able to choose to suppress 1% of their energy - in the event that they were to use a technique you could simply choose to suppress a given portion of the technique - such as in a fireball you might choose to suppress the user's energy where it is used to contain the energy (the outside of the sphere) which would make it explode - damaging the user. It wouldn't simply be 1% of the total energy used within the technique - having an ability that allows you to prevent the "exert[ion of] their Reiryoku" would allow you to choose where this prevention occurs.

Lets assume however that you WERENT able to choose what part to suppress but instead it applied to all energy equally. If you are able to control ANY of the energy within the entity even if that is purely not allowing it to be released then technically speaking you can control ALL of it.

The reason for this is because by being able to exert influence inside the entity you must be able to negotiate or negate their influence outside of the entity (think about it like trying to put your finger into the end of a running hose - it can only be done if you push the water out of the way) then establish a base of control (like a beach head) from which to exert your influence inside of them (thats right you are actually controlling a function of their own body/soul).

By being able to exert influence within the entity you would be able to prevent their controlling their energy to release as reiatsu (or whatever else you so desired to accomplish) - it would even be feasible to claim that you are able (with practice) to learn to control their reiryoku as if it were your own, detonating their reiryoku from within, destroying their reiryoku growth potential (eg preventing them from levelling up) permanently damaging their current reiryoku capacity (making their rank actually DROP) and much more - including simple death.

To put it a different way it would be like allowing a technique that allows the user to control the beating of your heart (you might argue that nervous system control might be allowed - yet the stipulations would be heavy and the capacity to get rid of such controls are actually present in all such entities - you could destroy the nervous system control technique by simply forcing reiryoku through your body for example - not to mention that the defence against such abilities grow based on rank).

The difference with what I had suggested was the fact that I was suggesting that you target REIATSU (and possibly Reishi) as opposed to Reiryoku - which means you can effect within a given area without having to actually force your own energy within the entity and then prevent their use of energy that hasn't even been manifested.

[taiga]

Edited, I see what saying, is this more acceptable?

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"shunpo, Sonido, and Hirenkyaku." Why these three techniques? Is it because they are high speed movement techniques or is it because the energy is manifested within their own body etc?

"affected by the reishi of her Shikai," (just a) Technicality - change to Reiatsu, she does NOT have reishi manipulation abilities.

"indefinitely seal a spirit's being ability to utilize or manifest their reiatsu." Indefinitely? No. You might be able to prevent their effective manifestation of their reiatsu - but only for as long as you were exerting your own reiatsu to do so - so it is not indefinite.

"While sealed things such as shikai, and cero are effectively subjugated under her dominance." The problem with this is that the 'sealed' entities have their own reiryoku which is seperate from their user's (e.g. a Kumiko and Kuzuri have different reiryoku signitures) so it would not work - when unsealed the reiatsu detected is not just MORE, it is also different in nature.

"Gabanansu consumes a total 10% of Kumiko's reiatsu and will do so each time this ability is activated. Also Kuzuri can seal more than one individuals power, as long as they are too in her effective range." Does it matter how many people are in the range? How long they are in the range and so forth? It would make more sense for the energy usage to be based on the amount of energy that the target is attempting to use rather than the amount of energy Kumiko has available - why? Because lets say you are attempting to prevent someone of IL-W from manifesting their energy, it would be significantly less draining than it would for someone of EL-W correct? It should be based on the TARGET's energy... and the amount of energy to supress their attempts would be affected by whether or not they were actually ATTEMPTING to use their energy (if they arent attempting to use their energy it is rather easy to supress isnt it?).

Provided that you master stepping skills no one of the same rank would be able to get 50 yards from you to escape the zone unless you allowed it, so I think it is probably overpowered in that respect... particularly since it is a purely selective technique in who it effects basicaly you can use all of your abilities at their full power yet they cannot use most of theirs. Particularly when combined with a means by which to reduce their physical capabilites such as any simple bakudou it would be OPed.

This technique as it currently is would take an apponent one subrank higher, diminish every aspect of their non physical abilities (not including high speed movment) so that it was less than yours. While those of any rank lower than you are goners; they can neither escape nor attack/defend unless they have some sort of uber physical attack.



I would instead suggest taking your own rank [IL-S] and saying "by using her own energy she can suppress the amount of reiatsu that can be manifested outside of the target by [IL-A]; this increases by every subbrank she is promoted beyond [IL-S]." That allows their use of high speed movement while accommodating a rising energy cost AND ability to diminish increasingly powerful foes as she ranks up. It also proves a rather large hurdle for lower subbranks to overcome (they could do so for brief periods but would use up a great deal of energy to do so) while less of a barrier for higher ranks.

[taiga]

Shikai is re-vamped while some things were kept the same, also im sure i added in everything you said, so is this better?

[Empty]

Gabanansu [Governance] - so is this an accurate representation of the effects upon being cut by the released zapakutou?

• 2+ Ranks Below - Completely Prevented, lasts 4 posts
  
• 1 Rank Below - 45% Increase in cost, lasts 3 posts
  
• Same Rank - 35% Increase in cost, lasts 2 posts
  
• 1 Rank Above - 20% Increase in cost, 50% (or more?) reduction in power, lasts 1 post
  
• 2 Ranks Above - 15% Increase in cost, lasts 1 post
  
• 3+ Ranks Above - Completely Unaffected

Please indicate the full extent of: "their releases or special abilities would not be half as powerful as they were before being subject to Kuzuri" does this mean a decrease in power of 50%? 60%? etc At the moment though, given that this is the sole mention of this reduction in power I would likely remove it (or else make it a rule that effects each of the subbranks to one degree or another).

Does this technique have an initial cost to use (such as techniques like Cero/Hadou) or is the cost a gradual one (such as high speed movement, Bakudou etc)? If it is the former than it is likely that the amount of reiatsu used to perform this technique is used up as the target attempts to use their reiatsu (hence the fact that the technique lasts a certain number of posts) which means it would be possible for the target to release a large quantity of reiatsu to 'use up the restraints' you have placed upon them - basically theoretically they could pour out a whole bunch of reiatsu to lessen the amount of time they were being bound for:

((eg now this is just a stab in the dark -- lets say as a base they would need to burn up the same amount of reiatsu as you had used for the technique, for the same rank it is about one third (33%) and lasts 2 posts, lets say it is the amount of posts remaining plus one (3=2+1) by obtaining the product of these we get around 100% (one third times three); were we to use the two ranks above as an example they would need to burn up 15% times the number of posts remaining plus one (2=1+1) which is 30% (15%x2) of the amount of energy you used in Gabanansu -- this is the their amount of energy that would then be completely neutralised))

If it is a gradual cost on the other hand then the amount of reiatsu that it will cost you will increase depending on the amount of energy that they attempt to use (and thus the amount that is supressed), therefore it is important to note that someone of a higher rank could be attempting to use so much reiatsu that were you to attempt to supress it then you would use up most of your energy.


Jūzoku [Subjugated]—okay first off I would suggest that this is not going to happen given that two of the abilities ARE space related (yes you say they arent - but unless there is some other mechanism in place that is all i can assume given that the attacks are being instantly relocated (even if it is a sword strike)), moreover this technique sounds more suited towards a bankai than a shikai - although I can see it is influenced by Shunsui's Shikai the area effect stuff is usually Bankai related... however in the main I have been gentle on these ...

-Are the three rules permanently in place or can you select when they can take effect (although I notice that once they ARE in effect you are also affected it does not mention anything about if they are always in place)
-There would be a reiatsu cost for as long as these rules are in place, as well as a reiatsu cost for actually IMPLEMENTING a rule (for example for the first two rules relocating an attack or in the third rule for allowing the individual to use the wind based attack)
-Fukujū -> Okay so what happens if someone throws you into the air (after all the rule specifies jump) ?
-What happens if they are 50 meters in the air?
-What happens if they jump 6 meters in the air then land?
-What if someone doesnt have a 'behind' or back (afterall some entities are nothing like people)?

-Chūsei -> Does this prevent Fukujū?
-What if someone moves their back in the way (e.g. is about to be attacked so they turn around OR another person is about to be attacked so they throw themselves -their backs- in the path)?
-What if someone doesnt have a 'behind' or back?

-Hanketsu -> What if they arent using their arms at all? But rather legs? wings? tails? one of a dozen tentacles? Other Limbs? physical constructs?
-What if the individual is ambidexterous?
-By 'relative' to Sokatsui I take it you mean at a similar speed to Sokatsui? (relative could also mean one tenth or one million times Sokatsui's speed)
-Does the user of the 'wind' type attack need to know that the technique is available? How do they know how to use it? Is it simply intuitive?
-I would point out that attacking with your non dominant arm WILL effect the skill, speed strength etc of your attacks.

[taiga]

arc this creativity is a no go on here, i'll stick to the norm for a zanpakuto.